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Read the following written exercise carefully. Amend the imperfections in meaning expression, vocabulary usage or sentence construction so as to make the language not only correct and comprehensible but also good and effective. Refer to the REVISED VERSION only after you have made the necessary amendments to the ORIGINAL TEXT.
学习语文除了文法正确,还须向更佳的境界挑战。请大家细看以下这则文章,看哪里可以改进。
Boys and Girls Should Not Be Treated Equally
Nowadays, more and more women join the group that claims that boys and girls, men and women should have equal chances in the society and they should be treated equally. I do not agree with their view, because undoubtedly boys and girls are quite different from one another and they should be treated according to thier features.
Firstly, girls are physically weaker than boys. If they are treated the same as the boys, they have to do some “masculine”jobs, such as soldiering, mining, bricklaying-which all require physical strength and may involve dangerous situations. Obviously, these jobs are not fit for the girls, because their weak bodies cannot afford such heavy work and they may get injured when they do so.
Secondly, girls have their own good points which make them fit for some important jobs. As we all know, girls are more caring and sensitive to other people than men. They can do very well in caring professions such as teaching, nursing and other social services. All people think highly of them in these fields: students like female teachers better; patients would like to be taken care of by female nurses; customers prefer polite waitresses to careless waiters. If boys and girls are treated equally, does it mean that there would be more careless men doing these jobs? However terrible it is if a strong, tall, male nurse looks after me. It is so ridiculous that boys and girls should be treated equally in every aspect.
Thirdly, men are good enough to dominate the world and people are used to this, According to the history, almost all the emperors were males and most of them did very well. People would like to rely on men because they are strong, brave and decisive, and they have the abilities to rule countries, protect others, especially women. If men and women are treated equally, women have to fight against the robbers, build houses and make enough money all by themselves. In that case, they will say that there are no gentlemen who will help them in the world and they may even cry, shout and exclaim.
All in all, boys and girls should not be treated equally. In some aspects, boys are superior to girls and get more chances; however, in some other aspects, they are inferior to girls and get fewer chances. They should be treated according to their abilities and features. Since they are quite different in so many aspects, they cannot be treated equally.
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Boys and Girls Should Not Be Treated Equally (REVISED VERSION)
Nowadays, more and more women claim that boys and girls and men and women should have same opportunities and equal treatment in society. I do not agree with such a claim because boys and girls are obviously different and should be treated in accordance with their sexual features.
Firstly, girls are physically weaker than boys. If girls are treated the same as boys, they have to do some“masculine” jobs, such as soldiering, mining, bricklaying - which require physical strength and are exposed to difficult situations. Obviously, these jobs are not cut out for girls because their fragile physical condition is not able to cope with such strenuous work which may sometimes be risky, too.
Secondly, girls have some innate qualities suitable for certain jobs. As we know, girls are more caring and sensitive than boys. As a result, they can excel in professions that require care and affection like teaching, nursing and other social services. No wonder they are highly regarded in these fields. Hence the following phenomenon: students like female teachers better; patients like to be looked after by female nurses; customers prefer courteous waitresses. If boys and girls are equally treated, does it mean that there would be more men doing these jobs? How terrible it is if a strong tall male nurse serves me day in day out!
Thirdly, men have dominated some jobs. According to historical records, almost all the rulers were men and most of them did very well. People like to rely on men because they are strong, brave and decisive. Besides, they have superb abilities to manage things, protect others, especially women. If men and women are equally treated, women have to fight against robbers, build houses, make money by themselves and do many other jobs traditionally done by men. If that happens, there may be no man to help women who will then cry for desperation.
All in all, boys and girls should not be equally treated. In some aspects, boys are superior to girls and can perform better. In other aspects, they are inferior and become less capable than girls. Boys and girls should therefore be treated according to their specific features and abilities instead of being given equal treatment in all aspects. |
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